Today’s revision goals: Turn up the heat.
There’s sideways love in the YA nov. “Sideways” in the sense that it’s not in the driver’s seat, but it’s certainly in the backseat leaning forward. Though the character has a hot streak that’s crucial to the story’s climax, he’s fairly laidback.
And so he should be. I don’t want him running the show. But I’d like him to be a little saucier. Make moments a little more tense.
Connor McDermott, help me to channel your unending hots.