(I can see that as a line from a tween song, if it's not already.)
I finished the short story and debated one line in particular, a line the woman says, thinking it was too obvious. It would induce an eye-rolling "Of course she'd say that."
But I left it in and sent it 'round. The Flo and the Laurel both mentioned the same line. "That was chilling," Laurel said. "Whoa," said Flo.
The line stays. Perhaps not so inevitable after all.
For the 18th day:
Cake: "The Distance."